All right... so it begins... feel free to give me your criticism on anything I would need to improve in my drawing or paging...did any thing confuse you?... is there anything you would have done differently? Let me have it.
You can view the artwork in the positive critiques at:
Post by orangeyjususan on Oct 8, 2008 1:25:26 GMT -8
The only thing that I found a little confusing sequentially was the next to last page when the main character was waking up. Something about the position of the eyes blinking just jarred the whole flow to the page. If the angle of the eye is something that's really important, then I would suggest lining the sequence along the top of the page instead of the side. If the location of the sequence is more important, then I would suggest rotating the angle of the eye to a horizontal position than a vertical position.
Thanks for that...that page arrangement, where she regains consciousness, was a difficult choice...I wanted something that looked attractive by design(the way the panels were arrange on the page) but also gave the sense of waking up next to the person. I wanted to show Marian as a girl who sleeps with her eyes half open...(which is a personal choice...modeling her sleeping habits after a friend who would get smashed and climb into bed next to me every now and then, yay for college dorm room drama)... I figured...if people got that she woke up and is about to get pummeled...then it's pacing well enough.